an epigram for you

[just, not a very good one...]
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without water, turning living things black
without fire, lying stagnant on the ground

bright and burning
calm and flowing

passion, starving
freedom, longing

without water, burning everything to ash
without fire, drowning the living out

bright and starving
calm and longing

passion, burning
freedom, flowing

death bringing without the other
life giving when brought together

flame and raindrop
flash and falling

flame and raindrop
wind and blowing

-RLL (c)2005

Blegh. You know what I'm going to ask you...Critique, please