keep me.
love me-
it's simple.
i wait so eagerly.
i'm here
so love me.
bend me-
it's easy.
i curve so carelessly.
i'm agile
so bend me.
break me-
it's painless.
i snap so suddenly.
i'm fragile
so break me.
hold me-
it's inevitable.
i end up here so constantly.
i'm broken
so hold me.
-RLL ©2005
it's simple.
i wait so eagerly.
i'm here
so love me.
bend me-
it's easy.
i curve so carelessly.
i'm agile
so bend me.
break me-
it's painless.
i snap so suddenly.
i'm fragile
so break me.
hold me-
it's inevitable.
i end up here so constantly.
i'm broken
so hold me.
-RLL ©2005
3 Thought(s):
Amen.
This one's more "raw," if you will.
Dare I say, perhaps, more "honest"?
"Honest" probably isn't the right word, though.
Maybe here's what I’m trying to say...
With this poem, you tugged at my heart-strings.
With the last poem, you tugged at my head-strings.
What’s important, ultimately, is that strings of some sort are always being pulled…
I will definitely agree - this one is much more raw. I felt the simplicity of the words worked for that raw emotion conveyed.
Thanks much for the compare/contrast. It is very useful, helpful, insightful.
I will certainly be putting that in my pipe and smoking it down for a while...
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